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Reciprocity
Posted: 12/14/2004, 11:50 pm
by veryoldshoelace
A short story that I wrote.
Posted: 12/14/2004, 11:58 pm
by Joe Cooler
I like it. I think it ends rather suddenly though. Maybe through in a better clinching statement? I'm all about those although I'm not good at writing.
Posted: 12/15/2004, 12:02 am
by veryoldshoelace
i need to add some, my brain stopped working though, i couldnt remember anymore
thanks though
Posted: 12/15/2004, 12:06 am
by closeyoureyes
I agree, a better ending sentence would give it a more solidified ending.
btw: Edinboro University as in, Scotland?
Posted: 12/15/2004, 8:00 am
by veryoldshoelace
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Posted: 12/15/2004, 12:57 pm
by veryoldshoelace
I added some more . . . though i dont htink that this ending is much better
Posted: 12/15/2004, 4:36 pm
by happening fish
Oh my god.
Are you spying on me?
Posted: 12/15/2004, 7:28 pm
by veryoldshoelace
no, why?
Posted: 12/15/2004, 7:36 pm
by Lando
Charlie Sheen was in a movie called Terminal Velocity.
Posted: 12/15/2004, 8:12 pm
by superrgirll
my physics teacher had that movie poster in our classroom.