Reciprocity

veryoldshoelace · Post by **veryoldshoelace** » 12/14/2004, 11:50 pm

A short story that I wrote.

Joe Cooler · Post by **Joe Cooler** » 12/14/2004, 11:58 pm

I like it. I think it ends rather suddenly though. Maybe through in a better clinching statement? I'm all about those although I'm not good at writing.

veryoldshoelace · Post by **veryoldshoelace** » 12/15/2004, 12:02 am

i need to add some, my brain stopped working though, i couldnt remember anymore
thanks though

closeyoureyes · Post by **closeyoureyes** » 12/15/2004, 12:06 am

I agree, a better ending sentence would give it a more solidified ending.

btw: Edinboro University as in, Scotland?

veryoldshoelace · Post by **veryoldshoelace** » 12/15/2004, 8:00 am

veryoldshoelace · Post by **veryoldshoelace** » 12/15/2004, 12:57 pm

I added some more . . . though i dont htink that this ending is much better

happening fish · Post by **happening fish** » 12/15/2004, 4:36 pm

Oh my god.

Are you spying on me?

veryoldshoelace · Post by **veryoldshoelace** » 12/15/2004, 7:28 pm

no, why?

Lando · Post by **Lando** » 12/15/2004, 7:36 pm

Charlie Sheen was in a movie called Terminal Velocity.

superrgirll · Post by **superrgirll** » 12/15/2004, 8:12 pm

my physics teacher had that movie poster in our classroom.