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This is just for fun... :)

DA RULES! :evil:
1) Post your song with a title (or untitled...w/e)
2) Share with us (whoever's reading this) your inspiration for the song

Those are the requirements. You can post anything else about it that you like. You are free to give constructive criticism of anyone elses work but no put downs. Respect the writer. Alrighty, that's it.

HAVE FUN! :P
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ceramic self

Silences inside of me
Sirens wail without
My ears can hear their warnings
but my brain can’t make them out
Silences inside of me
Twisted by the winds
I blow away to nothingness
The silence always wins

Emptiness inside of me
But my air is clogged and thick
It oozes all around me
and its closeness makes me sick
Emptiness inside of me
But the pressure pushes in
It suffocates me slowly
The empty never win


My inspiration was a blank piece of notebook paper and a tune that wouldn't stop going through my head.

The mp3 is unfinished and may be difficult to match words to, but the melody is there. Let me know what you think. Please?
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Meh...why not :)

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TOGETHER WORLDS APART

DGDD


D
I’ve written to this girl so many times
G D D
And every time it feels I know her better

D
I know I’ve never met her
G D D
But it feels like I’ve known her forever
C G
Her path and mine may never cross
C G
We’re running side by side in this land of the lost
C G D
But I know I’d never want to be without her
G D
I may never get to hug her
G D
I may never see her bright blue eyes
G D
When she’s living out tomorrow
G D
I’m still stuck in yesterday night
G D
But she’s closer than she knows right now
G D
So much closer than she realize
G b
We might be a thousand miles apart
C A D
But I’ll always hold her next to my heart
DGD

D
Her words have turned to song now
G D D
As I hear her voice on the telephone
D
Like an angel singing
G D
Lets me know that I’m not alone
C G
The ocean and land may keep us apart
C G
It could never change the way that I feel in my heart
C G D
She’s my friend and I hope that she know that I love her
G D
I may never get to hug her
G D
I may never see her bright blue eyes
G D
When she’s living out tomorrow
G D
I’m still stuck in yesterday night
G D
But she’s closer than she knows right now
G D
So much closer than she realize
G b
We might be a thousand miles apart
C A D
But I’ll always hold her next to my heart
D
Another day is over
G D D
But my heart’s telling her good morning
D
As I lay myself to sleep tonight
G D
My dreams and thoughts will soon be soaring
C G
Across this land and over the sea
C G
I’ll be dreaming ‘bout where I’d like to be
C G D
Standing by her side and watching the day begin
G D
I would love get to hug her
G D
I would love see her bright blue eyes
G D
To be with her tomorrow
G D
Instead of being here yesterday night
G D
But she’s closer than she know right now
G D
So much closer than she realize
G b
We might be a thousand miles apart
C A D
But I’ll always hold her next to my heart

Wrote this for a friend who lives in Austrailia. Though we never met, we were able to get to know each other very well.
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Post by xoNoDoubt69 »

Aerin i really like that. Good Job. :)
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Aerin, I'd have to agree with Melissa (that's you name right? I'm so bad with names)...your song and the lyrics kick a lot of ass. :nod:
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candy-coated_fake wrote:Aerin, I'd have to agree with Melissa (that's you name right? I'm so bad with names)...your song and the lyrics kick a lot of ass. :nod:


Yep. :nod:
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My turn! :) I haven't written music to this yet...once I get better at guitar I'll write some. Some people may have read this before but I'm re-posting it because stinkythestupidfuckingcat wrecked my original poetry thread.

Tattered Dreams
By Richele

She holds on to her false-coloured vision
leaving reality to wither into flame
Unbeknownst to her young mind
her dreams will be fantasies devoid of names
Her life has morphed into a story
that trees whisper with forgotten words
Can she hear the blood of screaming pain
drip into the void of everlasting hurt?

I wish I could open her blinded eyes
to a world composed of lustful hopes
We dance together and weave a thought
and tangle ourselves in twisted ropes.

Now she's lost in the Paths of the Dead
voice are calling, beckoning her to die
Following the light of years long past
the putrid water stifiles her cries.
She should have left dreaming for the evening
when doors can be locked and are chained
I'd love to reach through the unknown depths
to save myself from drowning in vain.


I don't know if this really qualifies as a song...but w/e.

Inspiration: A couple of days before I wrote this, I think my dad said something about me becoming a musician, something along the lines of "you have to have a really special talent if you want people to listen to you. It'd be a good idea if you kept your mind open to other fields of work" or something. I don't think that exactly what he said...Anyways I was kind of hurt for some reason. That's where "her dreams will be fantasies devoid of names" came from. The "Paths of the Dead" came from Lord of the Rings, of course. That part of the story makes me sad. Well, hope ya liked it.
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soldiers song

this gas mask is a vacancy
i've watched you cry and i've seen you bleed
you've replaced yourself with what you need
and now you hang there crucified
by your own ugly butterfly

and aint it fucking hard to salute the flag
from the inside of a body bag?

you're not afraid though you've got much to fear
as the bayonet draws ever near
i can't be the one whose saving you
you're all alone and without a clue
you'll never get away from here
unless you close your mouth and open your ears
and as much as it terrifies me to say
that i've got to leave i cannot stay
you're too scared to fail so you never try
you refuse to live because you're afraid to die
and i'm so sick of telling you lies
and all those lives that you thought you saved
have earned you a spot in a shallow unmarked grave
while they profit from the life you gave
your sacrifice is for their gain
your purple heart stopped it's beating in vain
the battle's over and the war is won
but what the fuck have you really done?
the celebration is illusory
it's all a farce there is no victory
so act like a candidate and fucking run
the whole deadly game is zero sum
but it's too late for so many sons
their soldiers song has already been sung

and aint it too fucking hard to salute the flag
from the insde of a bloody body bag.
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Post by thirdhour »

those last two lines....wow. thats all i have to say.



and oh yeah, this line: "you're all alone and without a clue" is the only one i dont particularilly like. i know you need the rhyme, but i think its a bit weak and could use some work. the rest is awesome, dude.
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OMG!!!...all of you are so great at writing lyrics..I absolutely love them..and can actually really relate to them...congrats to all of you!!! :mrgreen:
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And he can't understand how everyone goes on breathing when true love ends, his mother whispers quietly... heaven's not a place that you go when you die, it's that moment in life when you actually feel alive
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starving eyes wrote:
and aint it too fucking hard to salute the flag
from the insde of a bloody body bag.



Is it alright if i put part of your song in my msn profile! i absolutely love it...but whats ur name... cause i'd want to give you credit for it and everything :P
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And he can't understand how everyone goes on breathing when true love ends, his mother whispers quietly... heaven's not a place that you go when you die, it's that moment in life when you actually feel alive
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I've only written two things, so I'll post them both.

Freedom Rings

Olive drab covers me today
Marching on without a hitch
A western man-made war machine
Boatman of the river Styx

Cold steel in hand, drilling right through
Told to fire in the night
Casings fall to the warm pavement
Freedom rings with every strike

One foot in front of the other
Orders running through my head
One foot in front of the other
“Shoot to kill, be sure they’re dead”

Old wooden shacks on every side
My target comes into sight
A broken-down limestone building
Fallen from explosions bright

Into rubble I slowly move
Wraith at corner of my eye
I turn and look to double check
Was it foeman or ally?

One foot in front of the other
Orders running through my head
One foot in front of the other
“Shoot to kill, be sure they’re dead”

The movement comes again in dark
I fire, aim sure and true
An instant in time, the world stops
My conscience twisted askew

Two big eyes lit by gunshot flame
Fear and pain live and pleading
Time begins to fly by again
There lays the child, small, bleeding

Screaming cries into the darkness
I fall down a guilty wreck
Then get back up and carry on
My job not completed yet

One foot in front of the other
Orders running through my head
One foot in front of the other
“Shoot to kill, be sure they’re dead”

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That was inspired by the whole war thing. It was really the first big world event for our generation, so I felt the need to write something for the first time.
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That Which Was Forgotten

it’s that which was forgotten
pulsing, steaming, throbbing, bleeding
lurking in a scent so rotten
plotting, needing, waiting, dreaming

how can you hope to face it?

shine on, little boy
your oracle eye has been blinded by the fright
shine on, little boy
‘cause you’re gonna need help,
oh you’re gonna need help tonight

your savior’s not yet with you
hoping, pleading, longing, screaming
your strength is gone, beliefs askew
crying, seeing, fighting, fleeing

how can you hope to fake this?

shine on, little boy
your oracle eye has been blinded by the fright
shine on, little boy
‘cause you’re gonna need help,
oh you’re gonna need help…

tonight it’s back for one last round
you try to scream, but there’s no sound
you see him there, just out of reach
you shine to him but cannot breach
the shield that’s up, upon your mind
still he comes to you, just in time
to take you away from this bad dream
and all the things it came to mean

how did you ever face it?
where did you learn to fake it?
the fire burns and bakes it
flames engulf and embrace it

so shine on, little boy
your oracle eye has been blinded by the fright
shine on, little boy
‘cause you’re gonna need help,
oh you’re gonna need help…

to shine on, little boy
your oracle eye is back strong and burning bright
shine on, little boy
someone's gonna need your help
oh yeah they're gonna need your help
in this life

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That was actually inspired by the novel "The Shining". However, I came about writing it after randomly thinking of the like "oracle eye, blinded by fright" while at work. I was reading that book at the time, and it just fit in really well. If you've read the book, you'll see where everything comes from. If not, you can come up with your own interpretation.

I've also got music written for the last one (all but the guitar solo, which I'm working on). I hope to get some recording equipment for my birthday in August, so it'll be one of the first things I record. :)
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Heres my favorite as of late

147: Your own Empire

I look into your eyes
I see your dispare
you try to talk to them
but they just don't care
inescapable dream
inwhich you never wake
you open your eyes
you see that they are two faced

What you dream is what you learn,
go back and see them, BURN
How you feel is how you lossed,
go back and see them, CROSS
What you want is what you desire
go back and build an, EMPIRE
One That Makes the Shadows go,
In your heart that's where you'll know.

"Bring me to my knees tonight,
Help me god, Help me fight,
[And] escape this desert of my lies
Unbareable how many had to die"

I realize i can't remain
Am i Going insane?
Insane? Insane? No No No No
Insane? Insane? No No No No

What you dream is what you learn,
go back and see them, BURN
How you feel is how you lossed,
go back and see them, CROSS
What you want is what you desire
go back and build an, EMPIRE
One That Makes the Shadows go,
In your heart that's where you'll know.

"Help me figure out whats right
what could happen if it is tonight
right my wrongs and take my share
all i want is to get me there"

I realize i can't remain
Am i Going insane?
Insane? Insane? No No No No
Insane? Insane? No No No No

What you dream is what you learn,
go back and see them, BURN
How you feel is how you lossed,
go back and see them, CROSS
What you want is what you desire
go back and build an, EMPIRE
One That Makes the Shadows go,
In your heart that's where you'll know.

(Narraration:)
Walking up an avalanche, learning my stress.
Dangerous to the human eye, a joyride for the insane.
But how is that different from what we do everyday?
We take unbelieveable chances without seeing any kind of warning...
Unbelieveable chances, without any kind of warning.

And I SEE YOU
I SEE YOU TURNING
AND I SEE YOU
I SEE YOU CROSSING
AND I SEE YOU
I SEE YOU TURNING
I SEE YOU CROSSING
I SEE YOU, REMAIN!

What you dream is what you learn,
go back and see them, BURN
How you feel is how you lossed,
go back and see them, CROSS
What you want is what you desire
go back and build an, EMPIRE
One That Makes the Shadows go,
In your heart that's where you'll know.

I look into your eyes
I see your dispare
you try to talk to them
but they just don't care
inescapable dream
inwhich you never wake
you open your eyes
you see that they are two faced
-Liam

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Great song LIAM
-Liam

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Thanks fellow CMer
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OK, no one ever responds to anything I write Liam, so just get over it. At least people read your shit. I posted a new song today and a total of 9 fucking people bothered to look at it, and 0 responded. Get over youself.
I faced death. I went in with my arms swinging. But I heard my own breath and had to face that I'm still living. I'm still flesh. I hold on to awful feelings. I'm not dead... My chest still draws breath. I hold it. I'm buoyant. There's no end.
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... i love you...
-Liam

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So hard to choose a favorite but this is one that I've been liking lately.

Blame
by joel forth

It’s a call to arms for peaceful people
To try to destroy the poor and the feeble
When they don’t understand why people kill people
You try to explain but you don’t have a reason now

You threaten the world with massive destruction
But you try to pretend that it’s not of your production
You manipulate us to get the right reaction
Then you pillage them all and forget the reconstruction now

[Bridge]
You say “Hey you on the other side of the world
You’re no use to me
Would you mind if I blame it on you
Coz I don’t wanna blame it on me”

[Chorus]
You better blame it on yourself
Coz it’s your fault you know very well
And if you blame it on yourself
You can start again

It’s a coalition of the one’s at your command
While the other ones would rather take a stand
To try to keep the world out of your greedy hands
When they tell you their position you don’t understand it now

You say “why would a country not want to kill
You could use their resources to pay your own bills
And when these people are no use to us why try to rebuild
Besides destroying their nation has been oh such a thrill to us now

[Bridge]
[Chorus]

No time to figure it out, you’re way overdue
Your time has just run out and so have you

Hey you trying to rule our world
You’re no good to me
Would you mind if I try to stop you
Coz you’re never stopping me

[Chorus] X2

You can start again
You can start again
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WOOO GREAT JOB!
-Liam

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I hope this is goodbye wrote:At least people read your shit. I posted a new song today and a total of 9 fucking people bothered to look at it, and 0 responded.


The same thing happens to me. It irks me...I put so much work into something and no one cares enough to post a comment about it. Waahh!!!
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