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A song/poem thing...tell me what you think.

Post by Candy-coated Fake »

Here it is. Don't be mean...just tell me what you like or don't like.

Tattered Dreams
By Richele

She holds on to her false-coloured vision
leaving reality to wither into flame
Unbeknownst to her young mind
her dreams will be fantasies devoid of names
Her life has morphed into a story
that trees whisper with forgotten words
Can she hear the blood of screaming pain
drip into the void of everlasting hurt?

I wish I could open her blinded eyes
to a world composed of lustful hopes
We dance together and weave a thought
and tangle ourselves in twisted ropes.

Now she's lost in the Paths of the Dead
voice are calling, beckoning her to die
Following the light of years long past
the putrid water stifiles her cries.
She should have left dreaming for the evening
when doors can be locked and are chained
I'd love to reach through the unknown depths
to save myself from drowning in vain.


Thar ya go! :mrgreen:
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Post by stinkythecat »

I don't think you wrote than hun.
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Post by Candy-coated Fake »

What makes you think I didn't write it? I wrote it, geez.
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Post by megxyz128 »

stinkythecat wrote:I don't think you wrote than hun.


ok really, either your someone from the board trying to be funny or you're just a really big douche bag. i honestly can't tell.
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I think this person just wants to cause trouble.
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Post by Candy-coated Fake »

megxyz128 wrote:
stinkythecat wrote:I don't think you wrote than hun.


ok really, either your someone from the board trying to be funny or you're just a really big douche bag. i honestly can't tell.


Thank you...I honestly can't stand people like that. Hee hee...douche bag :lol:

But the real question is "What do you think of what I wrote?" Forget the "douche bag", please.
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I'm sorry if I offended anyone... but it just doesn't seem to me like she wrote that. If she did, congrats, it's excellent but something makes me doubt it.
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Post by emily »

you misunderestimated her then.
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sweet blasphemy my giving tree
it hasn't rained in years
i bring to you this sacrificial offering of virgin ears
leave it to me i remain free from all the comforts of home
and where that is i'm pleased as piss to say
i'll never really know
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Post by stinkythecat »

Then I must've.
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Post by Candy-coated Fake »

And why do you doubt it? Unlike some people (not making reference to anyone in particular) I don't enjoy copying and pasting someone else's work. That's one of the lowest things anyone can do, in my opinion.
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Well I think you deserve an honest apology from me to you. I'm sorry.
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Good, and I accept it. Maybe you shouldn't be so quick to pass judgement.
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Post by Candy-coated Fake »

Damnit, now no one will read my stuff. Stupid stinkycat. :mad:
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Post by stinkythecat »

:)

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Post by emily »

fuck, you really need to be banned.
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i bring to you this sacrificial offering of virgin ears
leave it to me i remain free from all the comforts of home
and where that is i'm pleased as piss to say
i'll never really know
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Ooo...banning party! Let's start a coalition to ban stinkycat. Sounds tasty. :drool:
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we can cook him over a fire
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sweet blasphemy my giving tree
it hasn't rained in years
i bring to you this sacrificial offering of virgin ears
leave it to me i remain free from all the comforts of home
and where that is i'm pleased as piss to say
i'll never really know
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:nod: Mmm...charred cat. :drool:

I'd rather subject him to painful Chinese torture. :mrgreen:
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how about we make him commit seppuku.
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sweet blasphemy my giving tree
it hasn't rained in years
i bring to you this sacrificial offering of virgin ears
leave it to me i remain free from all the comforts of home
and where that is i'm pleased as piss to say
i'll never really know
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Hah, there's an asshole on the board that isn't me.
I faced death. I went in with my arms swinging. But I heard my own breath and had to face that I'm still living. I'm still flesh. I hold on to awful feelings. I'm not dead... My chest still draws breath. I hold it. I'm buoyant. There's no end.
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