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edited long after this thread's creation:
most of this is crap. i'm optimistically venturing forth the idea that it improves as it goes on, but that's probably hopeful delusion.


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i'm losing my tenuous grip
on the calm center core
that's keeping me sane
i've been trying so hard not to trip
on the hate that i feel
when nothing feels real

i'm being pushed towards the ledge
the hands on my back
speak of falsified love
about to lose myself over the edge
and who'll help me now
when i'm hurtling down?

every word i heard grates on my soul
until i just feel like killing them all
if i'm happy it seems like they aren't
so buried in hate and forgotten...

Very nice!

...i spoke to you of life
and you told me i was special
but you didn't say how
why should i believe you now?
and if i had a knife
and i welcomed the devil
would it take me away?
there's so much i could say
but i'm nothing at all
nothing at all.

a million directions and i've yet to find one
that doesn't lead back to you
a million transgressions and there isn't a one
that i haven't imposed on you
there are a million stars in the universe
but there's only one in mine
and you move like the ocean
and you love like the sun
and leave a million memories behind

That one is amazing!

Holy fucking fantasic

can't concentrate on anything
when my eyes have so much excuse to wander
you're always lurking, like a fishnet
waiting to tear my thoughts asunder
couldn't live with it if i told
and yet i can't live without you
a war is raging and its fires aren't going out

so stay a while by me
don't lift your green eyes from me
the world is bland without your emerald stare
so linger a little longer
amuse me while I wonder
how the world could be so damn unfair

alex, as always, your poetry moves me. very nice work.

how are you so good at this? basically everything i've attempted sucks so far. I'm so Englishly challanged.

happeninfish wrote:can't concentrate on anything
when my eyes have so much excuse to wander
you're always lurking, like a fishnet
waiting to tear my thoughts asunder
couldn't live with it if i told
and yet i can't live without you
a war is raging and its fires aren't going out

so stay a while by me
don't lift your green eyes from me
the world is bland without your emerald stare
so linger a little longer
amuse me while I wonder
how the world could be so damn unfair

green eyes.

heh

brilliant. simply brilliant
Alex is my writing Jesus
and don't you forget it!

Forget what?

Oh, wait, I remember.

Alex writes my papers for me.

hehe.

heh, not exactly, Beth


the word just came
today the future's real
counting the seconds to you

the broken lines
the glass to my hot steel
destiny has come crashing through

It's not fair that you can write that well...

you're so silly, Robbo. I wrote that in the middle of french class, it took me like 3 seconds. it's just a couple scribbled lines

And the fact that you can do it so easily makes it even more unfair!

Prone before the light, I pray
Though the God I seek has little care
Hopeless am I, as I kneel and sway
That my words are more than wasted air

But why, then, does the tilting Earth
With silent field and watchful beast
Demand, insist, to know my worth
When I am worth the least?

Your greatness blinds me
In a way you'll never know
All-encompassing
Poetic from head to toe