deluge. [shamefully broken]

happening fish · Post by **happening fish** » 4/13/2003, 10:33 am

edited long after this thread's creation:
most of this is crap. i'm optimistically venturing forth the idea that it improves as it goes on, but that's probably hopeful delusion.

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i'm losing my tenuous grip
on the calm center core
that's keeping me sane
i've been trying so hard not to trip
on the hate that i feel
when nothing feels real

i'm being pushed towards the ledge
the hands on my back
speak of falsified love
about to lose myself over the edge
and who'll help me now
when i'm hurtling down?

every word i heard grates on my soul
until i just feel like killing them all
if i'm happy it seems like they aren't
so buried in hate and forgotten...

Axtech · Post by **Axtech** » 4/13/2003, 11:17 am

Very nice! :nod:

sandsleeper · Post by **sandsleeper** » 4/13/2003, 11:59 am

i think i know that feeling...

happening fish · Post by **happening fish** » 4/13/2003, 2:23 pm

...i spoke to you of life
and you told me i was special
but you didn't say how
why should i believe you now?
and if i had a knife
and i welcomed the devil
would it take me away?
there's so much i could say
but i'm nothing at all
nothing at all.

happening fish · Post by **happening fish** » 4/13/2003, 6:02 pm

a million directions and i've yet to find one
that doesn't lead back to you
a million transgressions and there isn't a one
that i haven't imposed on you
there are a million stars in the universe
but there's only one in mine
and you move like the ocean
and you love like the sun
and leave a million memories behind

Axtech · Post by **Axtech** » 4/13/2003, 6:04 pm

That one is amazing!

happening fish · Post by **happening fish** » 4/13/2003, 6:04 pm

Susan · Post by **Susan** » 4/13/2003, 8:00 pm

Holy fucking fantasic

happening fish · Post by **happening fish** » 4/13/2003, 8:37 pm

can't concentrate on anything
when my eyes have so much excuse to wander
you're always lurking, like a fishnet
waiting to tear my thoughts asunder
couldn't live with it if i told
and yet i can't live without you
a war is raging and its fires aren't going out

so stay a while by me
don't lift your green eyes from me
the world is bland without your emerald stare
so linger a little longer
amuse me while I wonder
how the world could be so damn unfair

lora · Post by **lora** » 4/14/2003, 12:51 pm

alex, as always, your poetry moves me. very nice work.

starseed_10 · Post by **starseed_10** » 4/14/2003, 1:58 pm

how are you so good at this? basically everything i've attempted sucks so far. I'm so Englishly challanged.

superboots · Post by **superboots** » 4/14/2003, 3:58 pm

happeninfish wrote:can't concentrate on anything
when my eyes have so much excuse to wander
you're always lurking, like a fishnet
waiting to tear my thoughts asunder
couldn't live with it if i told
and yet i can't live without you
a war is raging and its fires aren't going out

so stay a while by me
don't lift your green eyes from me
the world is bland without your emerald stare
so linger a little longer
amuse me while I wonder
how the world could be so damn unfair

green eyes.

heh :mrgreen:

brilliant. simply brilliant
Alex is my writing Jesus
and don't you forget it!
:thumbs:

Axtech · Post by **Axtech** » 4/14/2003, 3:58 pm

Forget what?

Oh, wait, I remember.

superboots · Post by **superboots** » 4/14/2003, 3:59 pm

Alex writes my papers for me.

hehe. :mrgreen:

happening fish · Post by **happening fish** » 4/15/2003, 4:25 pm

heh, not exactly, Beth

the word just came
today the future's real
counting the seconds to you

the broken lines
the glass to my hot steel
destiny has come crashing through

Axtech · Post by **Axtech** » 4/15/2003, 4:43 pm

It's not fair that you can write that well...

happening fish · Post by **happening fish** » 4/15/2003, 4:57 pm

you're so silly, Robbo. I wrote that in the middle of french class, it took me like 3 seconds. it's just a couple scribbled lines :lol:

Axtech · Post by **Axtech** » 4/15/2003, 4:58 pm

And the fact that you can do it so easily makes it even more unfair!

happening fish · Post by **happening fish** » 4/15/2003, 7:38 pm

Prone before the light, I pray
Though the God I seek has little care
Hopeless am I, as I kneel and sway
That my words are more than wasted air

But why, then, does the tilting Earth
With silent field and watchful beast
Demand, insist, to know my worth
When I am worth the least?

Axtech · Post by **Axtech** » 4/15/2003, 7:59 pm

Your greatness blinds me
In a way you'll never know
All-encompassing
Poetic from head to toe