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Posted: 9/29/2003, 8:06 pm
by happening fish
Thanks guys.
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you nod your head but close your ears
i won't indulge in servile tears
for you
you grab my hand to pull me up
but damned if i need any help
from you
when i run
you won't find me
it's been fun
but what i need isn't here
my misused ears have had enough
i cursed your name and burned the stuff
from you
when i run
you won't find me
it's been fun
but what i need isn't here
it isn't here with you
Posted: 11/17/2003, 7:22 pm
by happening fish
I wrote a letter today
The person I wrote it for will never
See it
I tried to die today
But I couldn't decide if heaven would
Want me
Would you want me?
I quit my job today
I didn't give up so much as it gave up
On me
I slipped my bonds today
I tried to touch God but he wouldn't
Let me
Would you let me?
Posted: 11/17/2003, 8:42 pm
by starseed_10
go get published.
Posted: 11/17/2003, 8:49 pm
by Axtech
Your poetry is great. I agree, you should try to get published.
Posted: 11/17/2003, 10:04 pm
by sandsleeper
alex, you amaze me. one day the kiddies taking the can lit course i'm in will be slaving over papers about you.
Posted: 11/19/2003, 5:22 pm
by happening fish
Posted: 2/15/2004, 9:14 pm
by happening fish
i think this one is trying to be a song.
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sitting on the side of the interstate
beating the dash of this clumsy vehicle
a broken time machine
that won't take me back where i long to be
close the blinds, it's over now
I am everything I hoped I would never become
I did it for you, do you love me still?
and I fight this battle
take a walk down memory lane
broken promises hearts and homes
it's the rapture of being alone
au revoir tout le monde
this is life, I suppose
the blank walls stare back and I'm under the glass
watch me disintegrate, watch me explode
Posted: 2/17/2004, 6:07 pm
by happening fish
Yanno, if you hated it you can tell me that, too
Posted: 2/17/2004, 7:33 pm
by sandsleeper
i really like the second stanza in particular. especially the part about "the rapture of being alone." that line i really really like.
Posted: 3/31/2004, 4:41 pm
by trentm32
I hereby revive this thread...
Alex, write more poetry!
Posted: 5/10/2004, 9:22 pm
by starseed_10
do it!
Posted: 5/11/2004, 8:03 pm
by happening fish
whoa. hello there people! i suppose a revival is possible.
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The captive sits alone
There is a marooned shore somewhere inside her
Where waves move bitterly at the moon’s beck
An atrophied harpoon and vestiges of cloth
The prodigal sun lavishes light
And turns to dark under oaken limbs
Great minefields
My mind feels
Empty
Posted: 5/12/2004, 12:33 pm
by trentm32
I dig it, yo.
Posted: 5/12/2004, 7:58 pm
by starseed_10
werd.
Posted: 5/13/2004, 3:32 pm
by happening fish
Close your eyes
The world is scary
It’s better in here where all you see
Is all you ever wanted to see
Close your ears
The bad people are yelling
It’s better in here where all we say
Is all we ever wanted you to hear
Close your mind
Reality is angry
It’s better in here where all they teach
Is all they ever wanted you to believe
Posted: 5/13/2004, 5:55 pm
by clumsychild_
Very nice.
Posted: 5/13/2004, 5:56 pm
by Axtech
Extremely well written. The imagery and the cleverest of puns in the first are great, and the second one is absolutely spectacular!
Posted: 5/13/2004, 8:25 pm
by happening fish
If I had a penny for every time you danced
My jar would be empty
Because you are bankrupt
If I had a smile for every time you loved
My face would be blank
Because you are abject
If I had a murder for every time you lied
My tomb would be full
Because you are ruthless
Posted: 5/14/2004, 8:06 am
by trentm32
Posted: 5/14/2004, 2:19 pm
by happening fish
Really? I think I've only ever heard one song by them... but I don't remember what it is called. Lol.
