murky waters

starvingeyes · Post by **starvingeyes** » 8/27/2002, 10:07 am

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murky waters</font>
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crossed my mind
once or twice
that this time i might
not have lied
if we're both right
then the rest of them
are broken

yeah it's crossed my mind
more then a few times
that this time i fight
i just might die
and baby, if we're both
wrong
then it's the rest of them
who're broken

o it's sweet
with you
to be sweet
to you
it's purposeful
and colorful
it reminds me i'm
alive

liam · Post by **liam** » 8/27/2002, 10:56 am

^NICE JOB JOE, (I DONNO YOUR NAME)

deniedjunkie · Post by **deniedjunkie** » 8/27/2002, 10:58 am

, i wish i could write like that

Gimme_Shelter · Post by **Gimme_Shelter** » 8/27/2002, 1:42 pm

LIAM wrote:^NICE JOB JOE, (I DONNO YOUR NAME)

his name is mickey

Endymion · Post by **Endymion** » 8/27/2002, 2:36 pm

fucking fantastic

lora · Post by **lora** » 8/27/2002, 4:59 pm

Awesome. Just awesome.
I especially like the last stanza.
Really good job.

Endymion · Post by **Endymion** » 8/27/2002, 9:07 pm

Kid wrote:Awesome. Just awesome.
I especially like the last stanza.
Really good job.

I'm in agreement about the last stanza.

Susan · Post by **Susan** » 8/27/2002, 9:10 pm

True dat.

Stunning. Wonderful work.

happening fish · Post by **happening fish** » 8/27/2002, 9:13 pm

actually, i think the third stanza is the weakest of the three, but then it again it has a lot to live up to for the first two especially are truly elegant.