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committed · Post by **committed** » 5/16/2005, 8:25 am

my band is releasing our first single. it was cowritten by myself and the matrix.

Johnny · Post by **Johnny** » 5/16/2005, 9:36 am

You're calling your first single crap?

nelison · Post by **nelison** » 5/16/2005, 12:31 pm

So I listened to it. Maybe I just can't get into punk, or maybe I just don't understand it (if there's anything to understand) but here's my thoughts on it... The singer's voice is ordinary and flat. I felt like I could have gone down to the local high school and asked anyone to sing those lyrics and they would have came out with the same quality. The drums were for some reason the loudest part of the band. You had to almost find the guitar behind them to even know the guitar was there sometimes. The vocalist needs to be more prominent, and the drums need to be toned down. The lyrics were well written, but for a single it wasn't the most catchiest of stuff. They also tackled the usual topics (ie. no one understand me, I want to die, I'm alone in this world, etc) which made me a disinterested.

Ya, that was harsh, but if you're serious about getting into the music industry then I'm sure you don't mind the criticsm (and I'm trying to be constructive with it). Good luck though with your band.

Lando · Post by **Lando** » 5/16/2005, 2:14 pm

committed wrote:my band is releasing our first single. it was cowritten by myself and the matrix.

You write music with Avril Lavigne's shitty backup band?

committed · Post by **committed** » 5/18/2005, 11:43 am

the matrix is not her backup band. it is the production company that helped craft many of the thousands of hits off of her first album. and that song has nothing to do with being alone in the world or wanting to die, but i do appreciate your tips. i will try to mix the next song a little better.

AnnieDreams · Post by **AnnieDreams** » 5/18/2005, 2:06 pm

The Matrix has also worked with Hilary Duff...
I liked the song, but not so much the vocal style. To me it sounded sort of like her was unsure of what it was he was singing.

Rusty · Post by **Rusty** » 5/18/2005, 5:02 pm

It's pretty good, but I'm not totally wowed. I did like it however, but yeah the drums are loud.

Hope · Post by **Hope** » 5/20/2005, 6:01 pm

the matrix has worked with liz phair and lillix and other million pop people

Joe Cooler · Post by **Joe Cooler** » 5/20/2005, 9:59 pm

Well Jeff, I've listened to everything you've posted over the years and I can say this much. You and your band are improving quite a bit.

Gimme_Shelter · Post by **Gimme_Shelter** » 5/30/2005, 1:00 am

committed wrote:the matrix is not her backup band. it is the production company that helped craft many of the thousands of hits off of her first album.

i just find it impressive that she was able to fit several thousand songs on a single album, let alone a few thousand of them being hits

she must be the greatest recording artist off that one album alone

committed · Post by **committed** » 6/7/2005, 5:29 pm

true. good point.

dream in japanese · Post by **dream in japanese** » 6/21/2005, 6:22 am

you might say i'm crazy but i like it a lot. best jeff song i've heard to date.

reza · Post by **reza** » 6/21/2005, 7:23 am

Impressive, how did you manage to get a hold of The Matrix? Regardless of whether or not you like what they do, that's pretty cool.

dream in japanese · Post by **dream in japanese** » 6/21/2005, 9:52 am

committed · Post by **committed** » 7/3/2005, 11:32 am

i listened to too much slapstick and osker and now we play this song like 100 bpm faster. it owns.

Neon Soul · Post by **Neon Soul** » 7/4/2005, 7:31 am

committed · Post by **committed** » 7/29/2005, 8:27 pm

i wish!

naveed99 · Post by **naveed99** » 8/4/2005, 11:50 am

abit more of an exciting drum beat would definitly help the song, its too monotone. He really juse uses the bass, snare, and hi-hats during the whole song, gets boring after a while.

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