rachel's song

starvingeyes · Post by **starvingeyes** » 4/4/2003, 4:17 pm

rachel's song.

rachel stands alone facing down a coward
who hids behind his shining steel
his mind is empty as he demonstrates his power
the wounds he caused will never heal

the sunbeams do not reach the ground
blocked out by the overcast skies
through the air soars the sound
of a hero's dying cries

a tear gas funeral is all she had
as she lay there buried with the flag
that turned it's back

o say can you see?
the condoned atrocity
by the dawn's early light
o what a waste of your might

it just isn't all right.

and rachel stood alone against the horror
of serrated bayonets and genocide
paid for with american dollars
this just can't be justified

bravery, compassion and heroic spirit still
were the weapons of our peaceful hero
a martyr whose blood they did spill
wearing only armour of convinction and soul

a tear gas funeral was all she had
as she lay there buried with that rag
that turned it's back on her

o say can you see?
the condoned atrocity
by the dawn's early light
o what a waste of your might

it just isn't all right.

Axtech · Post by **Axtech** » 4/4/2003, 4:20 pm

I like it.

happening fish · Post by **happening fish** » 4/4/2003, 4:46 pm

Very nice...

sandsleeper · Post by **sandsleeper** » 4/4/2003, 5:07 pm

*applauds*

Mechanical Thought · Post by **Mechanical Thought** » 4/4/2003, 5:19 pm

Penguin Josh · Post by **Penguin Josh** » 4/4/2003, 7:24 pm

dream in japanese · Post by **dream in japanese** » 4/4/2003, 9:17 pm

nice

Sufjan Stevens · Post by **Sufjan Stevens** » 4/4/2003, 9:30 pm

I'll give you more than one word to this song. I really liked it. The "the wounds he caused will never heal" line seems a little weak, maybe forced, but beyond that, it's very strong. I suppose if you change just that line the song would be much better because that seems to be the only corny, hackneyed line in nearly every song. Either way, what you wrote was damn impressive.

committed · Post by **committed** » 4/5/2003, 2:25 am

i'm going to record this song

liam · Post by **liam** » 4/5/2003, 12:11 pm

Liam Like

buzhwa · Post by **buzhwa** » 4/5/2003, 12:40 pm

its back

Very nice work!

thirdhour · Post by **thirdhour** » 4/5/2003, 4:31 pm

does the song have music written for it?

lora · Post by **lora** » 4/5/2003, 4:39 pm

wow. very good.

starvingeyes · Post by **starvingeyes** » 4/7/2003, 12:27 pm

thank youse, thank youse.

no, no music. i do not play de instruments.

thirdhour · Post by **thirdhour** » 4/7/2003, 3:27 pm

aah, i see.