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My first semi-creative attempt

Postby Axtech » 8/17/2002, 6:50 pm

As much as I like the lyrics to Innocent, I've always thought it would be cool if the lyrics compared the "problems" we face to real problems that others face...

Oh, well Johnny wishes he was famous
Spends his time alone in the basement
With Lennon and Cobain and
A guitar and a stereo
Tina wishes she was a dancer
And that she'd never heard of cancer
She wishes God would give her some answers
And make her feel beautiful

I remember feeling low
I remember losing hope
I remember all the feelings
And the day they stopped

We are, we are all innocent
We are all innocent
We are, we are

Oh, well <insert foreign name here>'s losing faith in what she's told
Eats no food, wears old torn clothes
Thinks of living in a new home
Far away from the war
And while she wishes she was out of this
She feels small and defenseless
None of this makes any sense
Starvation takes its toll

I remember feeling low
I remember losing hope
I remember all the feelings
And the day they stopped

We are, we are all innocent
We are all innocent
We are, we are

One day
You'll have to let it go
You'll have to let them know
oh
One day
You'll help them gather hope
So they won't be on their own

Remember losing hope
Remember feeling low
Remember all the feelings
And the day they stopped

We are, we are all innocent
We are all innoect
We are, we are


I don't know ... Raine could do better, if he had decided to shoot for that kind of contrast thing. I just thought it would be cool to compare what's in the song now to the more intense problems of a child in war.
That's also why I think it would be cool if the innocent video took place in a war-like situation, with the children that you see on TV, the starving, crying ones, who's sad face simply dissapears when you change the channel. Damn, that's a strong message that I just laid out there. I would like to have that in the song too... I guess it could go:

Oh, well <insert foreign name here>'s losing faith in what she's told
Eats no food, wears old torn clothes
Thinks of living in a new home
Far away from the war
And you see her on the TV
Looking so sad and lonely
She just needs some loving
But you choose to look away


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Postby happening fish » 8/17/2002, 8:09 pm

that's actually an awesome idea, rob. although, you should clean up the lines so that they fit the rhythm better, ie:

Oh, well <insert foreign name here>'s losing faith in what she's told
Eats no food and wears old torn clothes
Thinks of living in a new home
Far away from all the war
And while she wishes she was out of this
She's feeling useless and so defenseless
None of this is making any sense
As starvation takes its toll

Whatever, just minor changes. But it would work really well i think.
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Postby nelison » 8/17/2002, 11:26 pm

thats actually really good, both of you.
never really thought of doing something like that
I can't wait until the day schools are over-funded and the military is forced to hold bake sales to buy planes.

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Postby Axtech » 8/18/2002, 7:30 am

Great idea, Simone. I knew something was off in there... Usually what I did in my head was just something like:

"Far awa-ay from the war"

But your idea is much better. :mrgreen:
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