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my band is releasing our first single. it was cowritten by myself and the matrix.

You're calling your first single crap?

So I listened to it. Maybe I just can't get into punk, or maybe I just don't understand it (if there's anything to understand) but here's my thoughts on it... The singer's voice is ordinary and flat. I felt like I could have gone down to the local high school and asked anyone to sing those lyrics and they would have came out with the same quality. The drums were for some reason the loudest part of the band. You had to almost find the guitar behind them to even know the guitar was there sometimes. The vocalist needs to be more prominent, and the drums need to be toned down. The lyrics were well written, but for a single it wasn't the most catchiest of stuff. They also tackled the usual topics (ie. no one understand me, I want to die, I'm alone in this world, etc) which made me a disinterested.

Ya, that was harsh, but if you're serious about getting into the music industry then I'm sure you don't mind the criticsm (and I'm trying to be constructive with it). Good luck though with your band.

committed wrote:my band is releasing our first single. it was cowritten by myself and the matrix.

You write music with Avril Lavigne's shitty backup band?

the matrix is not her backup band. it is the production company that helped craft many of the thousands of hits off of her first album. and that song has nothing to do with being alone in the world or wanting to die, but i do appreciate your tips. i will try to mix the next song a little better.

The Matrix has also worked with Hilary Duff...
I liked the song, but not so much the vocal style. To me it sounded sort of like her was unsure of what it was he was singing.

It's pretty good, but I'm not totally wowed. I did like it however, but yeah the drums are loud.

the matrix has worked with liz phair and lillix and other million pop people

Well Jeff, I've listened to everything you've posted over the years and I can say this much. You and your band are improving quite a bit.

committed wrote:the matrix is not her backup band. it is the production company that helped craft many of the thousands of hits off of her first album.

i just find it impressive that she was able to fit several thousand songs on a single album, let alone a few thousand of them being hits

she must be the greatest recording artist off that one album alone

true. good point.

you might say i'm crazy but i like it a lot. best jeff song i've heard to date.

Impressive, how did you manage to get a hold of The Matrix? Regardless of whether or not you like what they do, that's pretty cool.

i listened to too much slapstick and osker and now we play this song like 100 bpm faster. it owns.

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i wish!

abit more of an exciting drum beat would definitly help the song, its too monotone. He really juse uses the bass, snare, and hi-hats during the whole song, gets boring after a while.