Posted: 1/27/2003, 5:36 pm
oh god no. oh god no.Page 4 of 4
oh god no.Posted: 1/27/2003, 6:01 pm
Possible thesis statement type dealio:
"I believe that cloning is wrong because of the possible health problems often found in clones, physically, mentally and emotionally; and because of the risk to the serogate mothers of the clones."
. . . . or some such thing. Put it in your own words.
Also, reduce that statistic or serogate mothers to 1/3, it sounds better than 4/12.
I thought it was very good for grade 7 as well.
"I believe that cloning is wrong because of the possible health problems often found in clones, physically, mentally and emotionally; and because of the risk to the serogate mothers of the clones."
. . . . or some such thing. Put it in your own words.
Also, reduce that statistic or serogate mothers to 1/3, it sounds better than 4/12.
I thought it was very good for grade 7 as well.
Posted: 1/27/2003, 6:15 pm
Thanks guys. But the trouble is see, that we had an outline we had to form before writing the entire draft of an essay. There was a Thesis, 2 Reasons, Explanation of Why You Feel This Way and Proof to Back It Up. I chose "Mental & Emotional Risks to the cloned beings" and "Lack of genetic diversity in the gene pool." My first reason is quite large as I got a lot of proof so I decided to split it up into two reasons. The health one, being the lost lives and the other being the mental & emotional damage to the cloned beings that do survive. So, I "conferenced" with the teacher and, being the stubborn person that she is, wouldn't even listen to what I was saying and told me to go back to the drawing board and re-write it using the basic formula in the outline. Stupid teacher. Here's my revised version I haven't finished yet, coming up.Posted: 1/27/2003, 6:21 pm
so much for teachers trying to expand the depths of imagination and creativity...
Posted: 1/27/2003, 6:27 pm
my teachers have all been pretty godd that way.
its my class that sucks. a majority of them are so stupid that they have no idea what i'm talking about, let alone understand what i mean. its sad, but true.
its my class that sucks. a majority of them are so stupid that they have no idea what i'm talking about, let alone understand what i mean. its sad, but true.
Posted: 1/28/2003, 6:50 pm
i truly am in love
Posted: 1/28/2003, 6:54 pm
with your teacher?
Posted: 1/28/2003, 8:39 pm
im in love with their teacher also
Posted: 1/29/2003, 8:03 am
G_S: Did you get your screen name from Jeremy Hudson's book?
Posted: 1/29/2003, 3:29 pm
I thought it was a Rolling Stones reference?