i wrote a poem for a contest.....did it in under 30 minutes because it was timed.
i uh yeah um there are so many actually talented writers here so if possible, constructive criticism please.
The Electrocuted Spider
You might find me knocked out
Clutching the sky and probable stardom.
What feeling! The finest threads trailing with conductivity
Wires and current and more current and
Too bad it hurts you when you don’t want to feel the flow.
It happens sometimes. When it does, it feels incessant.
Acrid with bright lights and sour smoke, upside down, twitching insistently,
The Extravagant Eight! We’ll be famous.
I can’t control myself.
But I’m not dead with stage fright, right? What is
Wrong
With my legs doing a jittery dance on this platform of empty air?