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An Odd Technical Writing Question

Postby Driven » 12/16/2014, 2:06 pm

Hey All, I have a question and I'm not sure if this is a thing or not, but it's got to be something. One thing that I love that Raine did was write his lyrics like this:

"As the world explodes, we fall out of it....
As the world implodes, we fall into it"

He would repeat words and phrases, but change them every so slightly. To a different word, or a word that's similar or rhymes.

Is there a term for this technique? I really love it, and would love to learn more examples of it. I'm blanking out on other example from songs, but he used to do it a ton. And very creatively.
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Re: An Odd Technical Writing Question

Postby myownsatellite » 12/16/2014, 7:23 pm

It's not something I've ever seen "labeled" with a specific term in writing, I think it's just a style.
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Re: An Odd Technical Writing Question

Postby ShatsBassoon » 12/17/2014, 1:36 pm

I would venture to say "turn of phrase" or semantic phrasing.
Raine does it often, a good example in Superman's Dead "Weather or whether not..."
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Re: An Odd Technical Writing Question

Postby ClumsyGirl618 » 12/21/2014, 11:59 am

Potato Girl has a few of them. "Something's teasing." "Something's seizing."
"But I'm just so tired of waking up on the ground" But I'm just so tired of waking up all alone."

4 am as well. "Never thought I would forget this hate. Never thought I would just bend this way."



Driven wrote:Hey All, I have a question and I'm not sure if this is a thing or not, but it's got to be something. One thing that I love that Raine did was write his lyrics like this:

"As the world explodes, we fall out of it....
As the world implodes, we fall into it"

He would repeat words and phrases, but change them every so slightly. To a different word, or a word that's similar or rhymes.

Is there a term for this technique? I really love it, and would love to learn more examples of it. I'm blanking out on other example from songs, but he used to do it a ton. And very creatively.
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Re: An Odd Technical Writing Question

Postby ClumsyGirl618 » 12/21/2014, 12:07 pm

After thinking about this a bit. I decided that these mostly occur in Clumsy and Happiness songs. If you look at the liner notes or even the lyrics that are posted on here in the songs section... you'll see a ton of them.

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Re: An Odd Technical Writing Question

Postby Driven » 12/23/2014, 3:55 pm

I'm trying super hard to figure out a term for this, haha. I'm not sure why I'm so set on finding one. It seems like it's a form of thematic patterning, though with a twist.

Also, a side note as I'm looking into writing techniques. I've got to assume that "An ordinary girl, and ordinary waist" was intentionally written to have two meanings of the word waist/waste. Until I read the lyrics, I always assumed it was just "waste".
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