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Liam's New Song #2

Postby liam » 5/24/2003, 8:20 am

here's something i played around with, its not very good, but it has a nice touch to it...

129: When It Ends

I can't complain
about the widows
a new romance
a broken window

And Here he comes to save the day
Another way to end disgrace
And here he comes to end the day
Another way to be disgraced

I can't complain
about the middle
an old romance
a fixed up window

And here he comes to save the day
Another way to end disgrace
And Here he comes to end the day
Another way to be disgraced

I cannot be here when it ends
I cannot be here when it ends
I cannot be here when it ends
I cannot be here when it ends

I can't complain
about the lions
an old method
leaves you cryin

And here he comes to save the day
Another way to end disgrace
And Here he comes to end the day
Another way to be disgraced

I cannot be here when it ends
I cannot be here when it ends
I cannot be here when it ends
I cannot be here when it ends
ends.... ends...

I broke the lock and let me in
a new romance and old sin
Can't keep me here for way too long
I must be back before the wind is gone

And here I come to save the day
Another way to end disgrace
And Here I come to end the day
Another way to be disgraced

I cannot be here when it ends
I cannot be here when it ends
I cannot be here when it ends
I cannot be here when it ends...
ends... ends... ends....

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This is a song i wrote when I was thinking about something that was very disturbing. Its pretty clear in the song.

130: "I'm So Sorry"

A room for silence And for sleep
The last of roses you can't keep
1000 expressions both good and bad
You'd never loved but you wished you had

No more shadow beneath your feet
Friendly man you'd never want to meet
With one foot through the open door
You saw the right way but nothing more

With the words carved in "I'm so sorry"
And the love extended from the family
What i wouldn't do for just one day
What i wouldn't do for just one more day yeah.

A meaningless poem read to a crowd
said to everyone without makeing a sound
1000 messeges both good and bad
You never cared but i wish you had

No more waking from your sleep
Lonely man you'd never meet
With one foot out the way
You saw the wrong and not today

With the words carved in "I'm so sorry"
And the love extend from the family
I can't explain the things I'd do
in just one more day without you

And I can't explain
the whole world crashing down on me
And I can't remember
the last thing i wanted to tell you honestly
ANd I can't explain
the way i feel under all this pain
and I can't remember
If you'd ever wanted to see me again

And here she comes to stare at us
While I suffocate from all the rush
I can't remember all of our dreams
But i know you'll stay in all my memory
With the words carved in "I'm so sorry"
And the love extend from the family
I can't explain the things I'd do
in just one more day without you
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-Liam

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Postby LightRainShower » 5/27/2003, 12:59 pm

You're first song is quite good... But the second one just blew me away... Especially the bit about the meaningless poem read to a crowd... Really good, wow... When it Ends is good, but I'd need to hear it to like it... I can get the definity pattern and melody from it... Very nice :)
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Postby liam » 5/28/2003, 3:51 pm

Thanks alot, and the thing about needing to hear it... well your gonna have to wait a while, i can't play any instruments just yet and ahh... i don't have a band... or any friends who can play instruments... but i'm working on it
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Postby liam » 5/28/2003, 3:54 pm

also, about this, i wrote this about a girl i know who i'm good friends with and she talks about dying alot, she's recently getting caught into drugs, and just last week her aunt died of an O.D. Yet, she's stil going deeper into drugs...
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Postby liam » 5/28/2003, 3:57 pm

I wrote this about a friend not the same friend from the last one. This ones about my feeling toward my friend not telling me something that i found somewhat important for him to tell me. Its sorta on a binge of Matt Good with my own little mind, but other than that i think everythings good.

131: Truthfully Lying

I feel a change in the seasons
I feel a new part comin
I'm awake, uncontrolably asleep
I'm concerned but no one else can see

ANd Your- So Ashamed
And its- everything you wanted it to be

I see a hole in the night
I see a wait inside of you
I'm close but instantly apart
I'll never be your anything

And Your- So Ashamed
And its- everything you wanted it to be

But Your Dying
Your truthfully lying
And your Runnin
And Constantly stopping to speak

I feel a change in the seasons
I feel a new part comin
I'm awake, uncontrolably asleep
I'm concerned but no one else can see

And here it up and comes again
A secret among all of your friends
a treasure to nine out of ten
A Silence shaped up to me

And Your- So Ashamed
And its- everything you wanted it to be

But Your Dying
Your truthfully lying
And your Runnin
And Constantly stopping to speak

ANd Your- So Ashamed
And its- everything you wanted it to be
-Liam

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Postby liam » 6/19/2003, 4:23 am

133:Come to the Close

A brave man sings you away
and what he offers you every day
A kind of feeling of courage
is lost... is lost in this...

Another aproaches you with a smile
A Game to play so run for miles
A kind of feeling of happiness
is lost... is lost in...

And I never meant for this
A New feeling to define emptiness
A kind of release you need
Is never found when you walk away from me
A new situation racing
A kind of Narc Confiscating
For every thing you need
And that everything is not...[me]

A cancer upon your shoulders
Shouting out which is older
The excuse or the melody
All refuse and change with me

A truthful man rises upon
rips you apart and now he's gone
Your perciption of decieving
is lost... is lost

And I never meant for this
A New feeling to define emptiness
A kind of release you need
Is never found when you walk away from me
A new situation racing
A kind of Narc Confiscating
For every thing you need
And that everything is not...
Me...

Rip me apart... Bring me Away
Rip Me apart... Bring me Away
The situation comes to a close
And there goes another day
Situation comes to a close
and there goes another day
No need to worry... no need to stay
No need to worry... no need to stay
The realization comes to a close
and win lossed another day
The situation comes to a close
and there goes another day

And I never meant for this
A New feeling to define emptiness
A kind of release you need
Is never found when you walk away from me
A new situation racing
A kind of Narc Confiscating
For every thing you need
And that everything is not...me
-Liam

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Postby stinkythecat » 6/21/2003, 3:08 pm

The second one is pretty good. I can imagine your songs being a hit, but just in that "flash-in-the-pan" way.
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Postby Candy-coated Fake » 6/21/2003, 3:30 pm

Fuck, stinkycat. What's with you degrading people's work? First mine now his? All these songs are good. "Flash in a pan"? :wtf:


For the person that wrote the lyrics: wow. I love em. They sound as if they'd make perfect songs. I have a picture for your second song. It's not by me, but I think it goes with your poem. Well, maybe it doesn't...oh well.
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Postby emily » 6/21/2003, 3:32 pm

Christ, there's nothing wrong with being honest, but "flash-in-a-pan?" Have you had no experience whatsoever talking to people?
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it hasn't rained in years
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leave it to me i remain free from all the comforts of home
and where that is i'm pleased as piss to say
i'll never really know
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Postby stinkythecat » 6/21/2003, 3:37 pm

Look, as I said, not everyone can say things to make you happy. I was giving my honest opinion and from my experiences, it does sound like one of those pop/punk songs that might make it onto MTV, then be quickly forgotten. As I said, only my opinion, don't get your panties all in a bunch.
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Postby Candy-coated Fake » 6/21/2003, 3:38 pm

You don't have to be an ass about it though. Being nice to writers will get you much farther than being a jerk to them.
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Postby emily » 6/21/2003, 3:39 pm

that's bullshit. you can be a little bit nicer at least. its not impossible.
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sweet blasphemy my giving tree
it hasn't rained in years
i bring to you this sacrificial offering of virgin ears
leave it to me i remain free from all the comforts of home
and where that is i'm pleased as piss to say
i'll never really know
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Postby stinkythecat » 6/21/2003, 5:21 pm

what's the point?
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Postby Candy-coated Fake » 6/21/2003, 7:30 pm

We could also say "what's the point of you being a bitch?' Admire his artistic-ness...don't ruin it with your stupid comments.
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Postby stinkythecat » 6/21/2003, 8:22 pm

[purr]Not everyone has the same opinion of his "artisticness" as you do. I'm entitled to mine and I'm also entitled to express in it whichever way I please[/purr]
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Postby liam » 6/23/2003, 6:40 am

I'm having a fun time reading all this...

stinkythecat wrote:Look, as I said, not everyone can say things to make you happy. I was giving my honest opinion and from my experiences, it does sound like one of those pop/punk songs that might make it onto MTV, then be quickly forgotten. As I said, only my opinion, don't get your panties all in a bunch.


yeah... i hate pop... and punk... damn am i screwed...
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Postby liam » 6/23/2003, 6:42 am

I love writing songs about Faith... this is another one of them...

134: Moment For Silence

I think I've found where you've been hiding
You're swimming in your faith
Let my lungs fill with water
And I'll Show You where I am

I saw you kneel down
before all of your sins
Disguised them as all your friends
And you forgave them again

I can't stand here to watch you prey
For blessings that never came yesterday
A moment for silence, and i'll never see why
but your never coming down.

I watched you break down
infront of me
So where was he then
I know your excuses

And I saw you put your hands together
I watched as you mumbled as if he could hear
ANd I saw you kneel down, your thoughts together
I watched you think as if someone were there

I can't stand here to watch you prey
For blessings that never came yesterday
A moment for silence, and i'll never see why
but your never coming down.
your Never coming down

And You know that he's never coming back
ANd You know that he's never coming back
And You know that he's never coming back
And you know that he's never coming back

I think I've found where you've been hiding
You're swimming in your faith
Let my lungs fill with water
And I'll Show You where I am

And I saw you put your hands together
I watched as you mumbled as if he could hear
ANd I saw you kneel down, your thoughts together
I watched you think as if someone were there

I can't stand here to watch you prey
For blessings that never came yesterday
A moment for silence, and i'll never see why
but your never coming down.
your Never coming down

And You know That he's never coming back
And you know that he's never coming back
And you know that He's never coming Back
But You Keep Your Hope At Hand...
-Liam

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Postby stinkythecat » 6/23/2003, 7:40 am

LIAM wrote:I love writing songs about Faith... this is another one of them...

134: Moment For Silence

I think I've found where you've been hiding
You're swimming in your faith
Let my lungs fill with water
And I'll Show You where I am

I saw you kneel down
before all of your sins
Disguised them as all your friends
And you forgave them again

I can't stand here to watch you prey
For blessings that never came yesterday
A moment for silence, and i'll never see why
but your never coming down.

I watched you break down
infront of me
So where was he then
I know your excuses

And I saw you put your hands together
I watched as you mumbled as if he could hear
ANd I saw you kneel down, your thoughts together
I watched you think as if someone were there

I can't stand here to watch you prey
For blessings that never came yesterday
A moment for silence, and i'll never see why
but your never coming down.
your Never coming down

And You know that he's never coming back
ANd You know that he's never coming back
And You know that he's never coming back
And you know that he's never coming back

I think I've found where you've been hiding
You're swimming in your faith
Let my lungs fill with water
And I'll Show You where I am

And I saw you put your hands together
I watched as you mumbled as if he could hear
ANd I saw you kneel down, your thoughts together
I watched you think as if someone were there

I can't stand here to watch you prey
For blessings that never came yesterday
A moment for silence, and i'll never see why
but your never coming down.
your Never coming down

And You know That he's never coming back
And you know that he's never coming back
And you know that He's never coming Back
But You Keep Your Hope At Hand...


Why does that sound familiar?
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Postby Axtech » 6/23/2003, 7:42 am

I like it, Liam. :nod:
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Postby stinkythecat » 6/23/2003, 7:42 am

LIAM wrote:I'm having a fun time reading all this...

stinkythecat wrote:Look, as I said, not everyone can say things to make you happy. I was giving my honest opinion and from my experiences, it does sound like one of those pop/punk songs that might make it onto MTV, then be quickly forgotten. As I said, only my opinion, don't get your panties all in a bunch.


yeah... i hate pop... and punk... damn am i screwed...

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