Hey guys, I'm trying out my poetic wings, so critique me, but gently...
Her Eyes
And her eyes are an ocean
One so vast, so open
The edges stretch beyond the sky
And I sit on the bank
My toes sink into the sand so low
Watch the sun burst from the sea
Oh the colors you should see
That fly like birds, so crazy, so free
Millions of birds that invade my senses
The colors perform a dance
A waltz just for me
Oranges and blues circle over themselves in love
I dare not move
For fear that I, Imperfect,
Would tear apart this delicate thing
But I am satisfied just to watch
To see the sun retire itself in the evening
Just to hear the ocean whisper in my ear
She walks into the room, and sits herself across from me
I faintly hear the crash of waves, and look up
A sunrise begins to break
Her eyes
So tell me what you guys think?